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Rich countries should not give job to skill workers (for example doctors and engineers) of poor countries as they are needed by their home country more than the rich country. Do you agree or dis agree.

#countries #job #skill #workers #doctors #engineers #home #country #dis
It is often argued that developed
countries
 should not make
opportunity
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opportunities
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 for
skill works
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skilled workers
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from poor
country
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countries
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 because
there
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they
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 are much needed
to
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in
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 their native territory rather than
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in other
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other
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another country
other countries
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country
. I completely disagree with
this
 statement and think
skill
 works should be offered
prospect
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the prospect
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 to make their way
according to
 own. First of all, It is well known fact that
private
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the private
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 sector which
are
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is
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 in rich
countries
 opt to recruit
skill works
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skilled workers
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 from developing
countries
 for their business. It is offered more beneficial for both employer and employee,
former
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the former
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one
 can improve productivity and enhance the quality of
product
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the product
a product
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 as well
as
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and
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 later
one
 achieve high paid salary and residency in
developed
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a developed
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country
.
Moreover
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Moreover,
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 usually migrators donate
portion
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a portion
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 of
salary
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their salary
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which has
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apply
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earned from a rich
country
 for closer relations
as a result
 developing
country
’s foreign income
is gone
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goes
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 up.
For instance
, In Sri Lanka,
annual
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the annual
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 total foreign income is 12 us
billions
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billion
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from
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apply
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it 75
present
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per cent
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has
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is
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 earned from foreign workers who
has
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have
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 worked in
rich
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a rich
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country
. On
other
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the other
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 hand, in developing
country
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countries
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 skilled workers are not offered high remuneration and recognition
that
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apply
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account they don’t
achieved
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achieve
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better
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a better
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prospective
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perspective
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 about
future
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the future
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at
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in
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 their live in mother
country
.
Furthermore
,
one
 of the most conspicuous trends of
todays
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today's
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 young generation who has studied and got well experienced
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in at
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at
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a
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 poor
country
 after
migrate
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migrating
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 to
rich
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a rich
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country
contribute
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contributes
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for
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to
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improving
rich
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the rich
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country
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country's
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 economy.
For example
,
according to
 Sun Day Times India is
pioneer
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a pioneer
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country
to
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in
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providing graduated medical
officer
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officers
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 to
world
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the world
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however
 lot of Indian patients have been dead every
years
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year
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owing to
lack
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a lack
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 of doctors.
To conclude
, when close
analyzes
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analysing
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this
 issue
one
 should be shown that
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the government
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government
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governments
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 of developing
countries
 should follow strategies for
keep
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keeping
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skill
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skilled
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 workers in their
mother land
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motherland
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 and should not impose
restriction
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restrictions
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those
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on those
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are
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apply
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who try to immigrate.
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