Advertising discourages people from being different individuals by making us all want to do the same and look the same. Do you agree or disagree?

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modern era, advertisement is everywhere, which in a way is shaping individuals ‘ outlooks.

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, a great number of people opine that

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development has

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in some people losing their individuality. As far as I am concerned, I fairly disagree with

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assertion for the following reasons. It is true that a bunch of people, especially those fashionable youngsters, have been influenced greatly by the bombarded adverts. They play the games that spoke men promote, wear the clothes that models or celebrities wear in fashion shows or magazines, purchase the brand that TV programs advertise.

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, a small group of people might end up buying or using the same item, which could

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them look identical in a way.

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, two girls may wear the same style’s green dresses walking on the street because green was the colour for the year.

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, most people could still maintain their personal features. Namely, even though many customers purchase mass manufactured products, there are possibilities for them to look differently. As most people may match, let us suppose, their clothes with different accessorizes like hats, scarfs,

jewelry

an adornment (as a bracelet or ring or necklace) made of precious metals and set with gems (or imitation gems)

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, people’s characteristics and behaviours will make them appear distinct.

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, two people might appear in the same clothes,

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, they could show totally unique personalities in front of other people.

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, companies and factories often customize their goods, which to some extent can show personal preference and their distinguish personalities.

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, there are different colours for a product, and users have various choices in a brand, one can either buy a Casio sport watch in pink or a black business watch. What’s more, buyers who tend to be different and have the financial background, could always tailor make their stuff ranging from domestic appliances to

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. All these could make individuals

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uniformed. To reiterate,

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commercial advertisements could make a small group of “trendy”people look identical, the vast majority of buyers still have their uniqueness as for the reasons I outlined above.

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

339 words

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Advertising discourages people from being different individuals by making us all want to do the same and look the same. Do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Nowadays more and more people are using smartphones and computers to communicate, so they are losing the ability to communicate with each other face to face. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

In some countries fast food restaurants and supermarkets give money to schools to promote their product. Do you think it’s a positive or negative development of children ?

Some peopel believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes ( for example working for a charity, umproving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger childern. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people argue that technological interventions such as mobile phones are making people socially less interactive. Do you agree or disagree?