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Environmental problems should be solved by the government instead of individuals and private companies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#government #individuals #companies
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There are controversial positions
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on
 the issue. As far as I'm concerned, I'm in favour of the idea that teachers shouldn'
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 be strict and my arguments for
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 point are listed as follows. For one thing,
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make reference to
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 should be made that, in
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today's
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 world school plays
crucial part
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a crucial part
 in transforming a person into a well-adjusted human being. Teachers at schools should be helping students
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 make them love learning. In
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 case
theachers
a person whose occupation is teaching
teachers
teacher's
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 should be
affectional
having or displaying warmth or affection
affectionate
 and understanding; they should assist to the right thing without
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uttering a loud inarticulate cry as of pain or excitement
yelling
yellowing
 or fighting in order to create
safe learning environment
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a safe learning environment
safe learning environments
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in the direction of
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 be strict. Another point to be made is that strict teachers may cause discourage
student's learning process
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the student's learning process
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 happy about any kind of homework they put effort in, might lose motivation to do more
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 of opposite.
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 will affect their grades as well as their future. Albeit,
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a bare majority
 of people regard that teacher's strictness might have advantages; From their viewpoint, strict teacher doesn'
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 necessarily mean ones who aren'
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 satisfied with
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the students' outcomes
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 let their pupils lose ambition and will to aim higher. So, for them strict teachers are more preferable for better results. Notwithstanding the objects seemingly existing, I'm inclined to believe that teachers should be strict. Anyway.
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 can argue about it endlessly...
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enacting
  • comprehensive
  • allocating
  • large-scale
  • accountability
  • profit motives
  • commemorative
  • global environmental crises
  • international collaboration
  • innovation
  • public-private partnerships
  • sustainable products
  • adapt
  • environmental policies
  • significant funds
  • environmentally beneficial
  • cross national boundaries
  • community or local level
  • responsibility
  • driving market demand
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