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When people travel into a different culture, they should adapt to the local customs and practices. Do you agree or disagree?

There are different and incredible cultures in the world, so most of the people want to travel and learn these cultures. Adapting to the local customs and practices is a good way
for
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of
 getting along with the local people.
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, it is not important to learn and adapt to the all things if people do not live in that
country
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 for a long time.
First
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 of all, learning different cultures is amazing for everyone.Nowadays
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people travel not only for relaxing
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but
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 for exploring
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learning new things from different cultures and improving themselves.
Adapting local
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Adapting to local
 customs and practices is a good chance for better communication with local people.There are some religious countries which you should not act as freely as your
country
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,
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for example
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, in İran women should cover their heads when they travel here. If
traveler
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a traveller
traveller
the traveller
 does not follow local customs, he or she may not be welcomed warmly in like sensitive countries.
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, I agree with
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 opinion that host
country
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 should welcome new cultures and differences. Because in
civilized world
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a civilized world
the civilized world
, when
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
 share their own cultures with local people, it gives opportunity to local people for better understanding different cultures and comparing them. It is
also
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 helpful for
host
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the host country
a host country
host countries
country
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 to develop their tourism industry and economy.
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, every foreigner has its beliefs and morals, so it should not be forced to adapt
rules
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the rules
 as
traveler
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a traveller
traveller
travellers
. İf travellers feel they are welcomed in that
country
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they will feel comfortable and want to visit there again. In conclusion, I believe that it is beneficial for travellers to adapt different cultures and customs.
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host
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the host country
country
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 should create opportunity for travellers to feel free in their
country
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 and it will be good for both
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country
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countries
 by learning different cultures.

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