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Each society has its homeless people. Some people believe that the best way to help them is to give them money. Do you agree or disagree?

#society #people #money
There are many people living on the streets because of the poverty. They do not have enough
money
 to meet their needs. So, many people think it is a good idea to give them
money
. I
also
 accept that we can help them by giving
money
 for their basic needs.
However
,
this
 will not affect in the long run and we can find other solutions. I agree with that
money
 is
important factor
Suggestion
an important factor
 in every part of our life for buying meals, living at home, for
health-care
the preservation of mental and physical health by preventing or treating illness through services offered by the health profession
healthcare
. We can give
money
for
Suggestion
to
 homeless people for buying foods or home. People join
to
Suggestion
with
 charities for supporting like that
people
Suggestion
person
. Actually, I think that there are better solutions than giving
money
 to these people. Many of the people living on the streets are unhappy and they are in depression because of divorce, loss of job
,
Accept space
,
illness.For
this
 reason
,
Accept space
,
firstly
, we can make conversation for not making them
to feel
Suggestion
feel
 invisible.
Then
,
Accept space
,
we can search easy job opportunities for them.
Also
,
Accept space
,
applying to officials or government departments is a good idea for homeless people. İn summary, I accept that to give
money
 to homeless people is a
way helping
Accept comma addition
way, helping
 these people, but İ believe that other solutions’ have
bigger impact
Suggestion
a bigger impact
.
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