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Many efforts has been made by countries to address challenges concerning the environment but the situation has not improved. .What are the possible reasons for environment degradation? are there any solution to combat ? Support your answer with specific reason and examples.

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It is a challenge for everyone concerning the global warming, many countries are coming together to face
such
 a challenge, but the situation has not yet improved. It is responsibility of
ever
(used of count nouns) each and all of the members of a group considered singly and without exception
every
 individual to take part in supporting the government and stand to protect the environment from getting polluted.
To begin
 with, the main reason for the degradation of
environment
Suggestion
the environment
 is the dumping of wastage by many big industries into the water, which in turns
effects
the conscious subjective aspect of feeling or emotion
affects
 the marine life. When the sea creatures like fish, crabs get effected it indirectly causes humans to suffer when we consume them. The toxic gases exhale from the chambers pollutes the
air which
Accept comma addition
air, which
 causes air pollution. Many people through waste like plastics
into
Suggestion
in
 the sea, which in turn takes the life of aqua creatures like
whale
Suggestion
a whale
whales
. They swallow the
plastic
 and get suffocated, as the polythene get stuck in their windpipe. There are many ways to control and make our environment clean, by not using much
plastic
. Individuals have
tendency
Suggestion
tended
 to use and throw polythene bags while shopping
,
Accept space
,
 bags made from
plastic
 are hazardous to health.
Other
Suggestion
Another
 alternative to
plastic
 bags is cloth bag or paper bag which
are
Suggestion
is
ecofriendly
. Industries should avoid dumping of their waste
direct
Suggestion
directly
 into Oceans,
instead
 a pit should be made to dump the waste and cover it. In conclusion, it seems environmental problems are crucial, and one should join hands with the government in order to come up with
effective solution
Suggestion
an effective solution
effective solutions
. Lack of participation by individual means environmental problem is beyond reach.
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