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Some people say that protecting the environment is the government’s responsibility. Others believe that every individual should take responsibility for it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Nowadays, the protection of the environment is a serious concern of the world, which should be dealt precisely. Some people believe that the
government
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 should be held liable for saving the environment.
On the other hand
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, a section of society has believed that every individual should participate in protecting environment. Before, drafting my final conclusion, I will discuss both views related to
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 topic. In
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 world of the advanced technology, almost everybody have their own vehicles for transportation. Due to
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 tremendous increase in the number of cars on road leads to
air
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 and noise pollution. The masses, must
use
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 public transit and avoid the
use
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 of their own automobiles in order to reduce the rate of releasing pollutants into the atmosphere,
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 impacting the
air
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 quality. There was a survey conducted by local newspaper which revealed that when people boycott the
use
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 of their personal cars and switched to the
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 of bicycles and public transport, there was a huge difference in the quality of
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,
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 the quality of
air
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 got improved.
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, the
government
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 must step up and take necessary steps to avoid harm to the nature.
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, ruling parties must strictly or amends the new environmental laws for setting up the factories.
Ecofriendly
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 transportation should be promoted by
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. I personally opine that, with the help of
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government
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the government
 and Co operation of civilians, we can save
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 beautiful planet together.
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