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Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think it is a waste of time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #art #children #school #waste #time
Dear
vijay
Suggestion
Vijay
, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. It's been a long time we met. Recently, I started my work visa process in
Canda
a nation in northern North America; the French were the first Europeans to settle in mainland Canada
Canada
. You know, it is very hard to survive here in
this
 pandemic, I lost my job and the opportunities here are very less. One of my friends suggested
Canda
a nation in northern North America; the French were the first Europeans to settle in mainland Canada
Canada
 will be the best place in my field so, I started looking for job opportunities in
Canda
a nation in northern North America; the French were the first Europeans to settle in mainland Canada
Canada
. I realised you are working there, and I want to get a few suggestions. After our Bachelors degree in communications, I did masters in networking. After that I did CISCO certifications to improve my skills and opportunities. I worked as a tutor at the same university I studied for a couple of years and because of the pandemic, there are very less students in university and we lost our jobs because of that. It is very hard now to get employment in the related field.
Canda
a nation in northern North America; the French were the first Europeans to settle in mainland Canada
Canada
 has a lot of opportunities for networking engineers even in
this
 pandemic time, so I applied for a few jobs and I got positive responses from two of them. Before coming there I want to know few things about the country. How will be the climate there? What are the pay scales?
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-expression
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving
  • cultural awareness
  • tolerant society
  • STEM subjects
  • employability
  • rigorous subjects
  • curriculum
  • school budgets
  • enriches
  • complements
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