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Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museum outweigh the disadvantages?

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Museums around the world have been a popular tourist spot. With a huge number of people visiting a
museum
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 every single day, their opinion on whether museums should charge an
entry
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 fee or not is diluted.
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, the minimal
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 charges are usually considered in an optimistic
manner but
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manner, but
 there
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exist
 some contrary views too. Taking
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 discussion
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, the positives and negatives of the above laid motif will be explored in the essay. Entertaining a huge crowd for 6 days in a week can be a difficult task and can demand some extreme foreground as well as background duties. These chores may not come in at an easy cost. To run and maintain a
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 there are several roles to fill in,
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 as
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 security guards,
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 guides, sweepers, administration and more. Along with
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, maintenance of a
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 includes restoration and preservation of
artifacts
a man-made object taken as a whole
artefacts
. A small amount of
entry
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 fee would not only allow the administration to hire a required amount of
employees but
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employees, but
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 advance the overall experience of the visitor by regularly updating the museums with new
artifacts
a man-made object taken as a whole
artefacts
 and
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 by improving the architecture of the
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. Eventually, with a great deal of experience to have, people visiting the place won’t have a problem with an admission fee.
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, some of the museums are government funded or crowd funded.
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 allows them to run the show without taking a single penny from the
visitors
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visitor's
 pocket.
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 case is followed in almost all national museums where the salaries for personnel as well as perseverance cost
is aided
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are aided
 by the state. While, for some local collections, there is a prominent possibility of them being maintained by the people of the area; they are commonly operated by some batch of volunteers and show a great example of
socialness
relating to human society and its members
socials
. One
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North
northern
carolina
the area of the states of North Carolina and South Carolina
Carolina
, where a personal collection of Barbie dolls, unique and valuable in its own way, was made open for all the tourists without taking any admission charges with the help of the town people. In conclusion, if necessary, there’s no harm in charging a little amount for visiting the
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.
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 fees or no
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 fees don’t really matter unless the experience is enjoyable, educational and something to be remembered.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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