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The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is not a secret that,
health
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 is the most important aspect of human life. It
isnot
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is not
 a secret that, by some individuals
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argues
 that
average standard
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the average standard
 of
health
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 of individuals will deteriorate. I agree with
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 statement, because the many types of fast foods are eaten by teenagers. So, due to eating fast foods, the power of
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the people
 will decrease. I will explain with reasons in the two
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bodies
, why I agree. In the 21st century, the industry of
food
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are developing
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is developing
 and the industry in the top.
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,
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,
the fast
ood
any substance that can be metabolized by an animal to give energy and build tissue
food
 are
dissipateing
to cause to separate and go in different directions
dissipating
dissipation
disputing
 sharply around the world. Unfortunately, the many types of foods
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 as pizza,
gamburger
a sandwich consisting of a fried cake of minced beef served on a bun, often with other ingredients
hamburger
 are harmful for
health
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 of individuals, but the major part of people like eating the fast
food
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 especially teenagers when individuals do not have time for cooking.
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, adults buy the
such
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 kinds of fast foods and teenagers are getting used to eating fast
food
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 products. It should be mentioned that, people are prone to diseases related to cardiovascular disorders because of the high salt and high sugar content found in these fast
food
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 products.
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, the stress related disorders are
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 becoming more common nowadays.. Everyone has
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problems and
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the
 main part of individuals think about the difficulties during the day,
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 the human stressed daily. So, daily stresses cause fatigue in a person and insomnia, heart disease. To sum up, I agree with the
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arguments that
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the average health standard
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 standard of human of life will decrease
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a unit of length equal to one twelfth of a foot
in
on
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 the future. In the future, consumption of the fast
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 will grow and the
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close interaction
contact
 exposure to stress will likely contribute to the decline of the average standard of
health
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 of many people in the
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of the relatively near future
coming
 years.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Standard of health
  • 2. Average
  • 3. Lower
  • 4. Future
  • 5. Aging population
  • 6. Chronic diseases
  • 7. Sedentary lifestyle
  • 8. Lack of exercise
  • 9. Poor dietary habits
  • 10. Environmental pollution
  • 11. Technological advancements
  • 12. Impact on health
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