The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is not a secret that,
health
is the most important aspect of human life. It
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is not
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argues
that
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the average standard
of
health
of individuals will deteriorate. I agree with
this
statement, because the many types of fast foods are eaten by teenagers. So, due to eating fast foods, the power of
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the people
will decrease. I will explain with reasons in the two
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sharply around the world. Unfortunately, the many types of foods
such
as pizza,
gamburger
a sandwich consisting of a fried cake of minced beef served on a bun, often with other ingredients
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are harmful for
health
of individuals, but the major part of people like eating the fast
food
especially teenagers when individuals do not have time for cooking.
As a result
, adults buy the
such
kinds of fast foods and teenagers are getting used to eating fast
food
products. It should be mentioned that, people are prone to diseases related to cardiovascular disorders because of the high salt and high sugar content found in these fast
food
products.
Moreover
, the stress related disorders are
also
becoming more common nowadays.. Everyone has
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coming
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Standard of health
  • 2. Average
  • 3. Lower
  • 4. Future
  • 5. Aging population
  • 6. Chronic diseases
  • 7. Sedentary lifestyle
  • 8. Lack of exercise
  • 9. Poor dietary habits
  • 10. Environmental pollution
  • 11. Technological advancements
  • 12. Impact on health
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