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Very few school children learn about the value of money and how to look after it, yet this is a critical life skill that should be taught as a part of school curriculum. Do you agree or disagree?

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Whether
money
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 management should be a part of the academic curriculum is a great debate. Most of the schools are already overwhelmed with the subjects they have to teach and adding personal financial affairs to the syllabus would make things worse.
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,
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 is a
skill
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 that teachers cannot instil in a child through lectures and exams and
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 is why I personally believe that parents should take
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 responsibility.
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 with, no matter how many chapters someone reads or how many
exams he
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exams, he
 takes on the value of
money
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 in life, until he takes the responsibility and earns it, is impossible to learn the practical
aspect
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 of personal finances. Teachers are not in a position to decide whether a student should work
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 study and manage his finance. Parents,
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, are ideal to handle
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. They can teach their children the value of
money
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 and put them in situations when they need to take responsibilities.
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, learning to manage someone's finance is a different type of
skill
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 that class lectures cannot teach.
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, a teacher does not know every
aspect
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 of a student's family and their financial condition.
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 is why the same lecture is not suitable for all students. Parents are in a far better position to let their children learn
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 essential life
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. To conclude,
money
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 management is a practical
aspect
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 of life and theoretical classes are ineffective to develop
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 great
skill
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. Parents,
on the contrary
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, should take command of
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aspect
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 and prepare their children how to value
money
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 and handle personal finance efficiently.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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