The government's investment in arts, music and theatre is a waste of money. Governments should invest these funds in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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This

year several

Accept comma addition

year, several

governments have decided to dedicate a separate budget for Arts, music and theatre

industry

. They want the

Industry

to grow and generate revenue. But a lot of people argue that spending money on Arts in unnecessary and the money should rather be used in social service. I disagree and believe

arts

Suggestion

the arts

, music and theatre are not only the entertainment

industry

but they

also

help

society

in other ways too. During the pandemic in 2020, a large number of people around the world were united by several forms of Art. Art is not limited to leisure activities, it unites the

society

in difficult times.

For instance

: In Italy, when thousands of people were dying due to COVID, people sang in their balconies to express that they are in

this

together. Many forms of art

is used

Suggestion

are used

to express unity,

secularity

, sympathy, etc.

Such

emotions and feelings are necessary for a

society

to grow. Every year India generates one

third

of its GDP from cinema. The more the revenue of a country is, the more

country

Suggestion

a country

the country

develops and it will benefit their citizens as well.

For example

, when the country earns more, the citizens have to pay less taxes and they get medical, educational,

etc

of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"

its

benefits. Art

industry

can prove to be a great resource for a nation's earning. In conclusion, I disagree with those who think it is better to invest in social service than Art

industry

. Art keeps the

society

together and helps the nation in development. It will be wrong to say that Art, music and theatre does no good to the

society

Submitted by Aysha Ali on Mon Jul 27 2020

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cultural heritage
public services
economic benefits
mental health
well-being
equitable access
creativity
innovation
prioritize
essential services
healthcare
education
tourism
global recognition
holistic development
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