In many countries women and men are working full time. It is therefore, logical for women and men to share household works. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Job is an obligatory to become
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philanthropically
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However in
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However, in
many kingdoms employments are pretended fully by
both
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genders.
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Additionally
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Additionally, both
both
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genders should segregate equilibrium the
household
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chores. I completely agree that equally dividing
household
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works
is
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are
fair
solution
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solved
solving
.
Firstly
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, predominantly in past men had an eight or more hours job and women have
onus
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the onus
a onus
of
household
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chores.
This
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is because men should only
allowed
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allow
to do
out side
beyond the boundary of; external to
outside
employments as well as house works by social legislation. Not stand with
this
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both
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genders have been busy in their monotonous life for
sake
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the sake
of money, albeit on dependency of job they are burning as
mid night
12 o'clock at night; the middle of the night
midnight
lamp from
down
the first light of day
dawn
to dusk for completing their dreams. As results of
this
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statement ken and women should create time table and segregate equilibrium house works.,
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However there
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However, there
are multifarious formulas for
mitigate
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mitigating
the "
household
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chores".
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, if men's employment
are
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is
different bin time than women
then
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they should segregate
household
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works by completing mopping and cleaning of vessels.
Nathless
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, women have conquered many equal rights as same as men's
,
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,
additionally
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there have not been gender differences between males and females from starting of 21th century. In conclusion, I
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words by agglomerating reasons and solutions. It may have been argued in
past
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the past
for
both
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genders should not share the chores because of men were provided
breadwinning
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.
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Nevertheless today's situation
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Nevertheless, today's situation
Nevertheless the today's situation
Nevertheless the today's situation the today's situation
has been changed from 21 the century. I strongly agree that males and females must share
household
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chores being illogical
otherwise
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.
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