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Some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and communities are becoming more isolated. Discuss both sides

#people #internet #communities
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The internet
 has played a major role in the world of 21st century, but according to some people thinking,
Internet
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 has done major change in people's life like it has brought people closer together and it has isolated too. Let's discuss
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, In today's world
internet
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 and communication has played great role in every
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 life in terms of each and everything. Through
internet
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 we can get lots of information on any topic. In the modern world, People of different ages use
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the internet
 and surf for their work purpose or for their entertainment purpose or it could be many possibilities.
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The internet
 provides both types of information either it could be bad for us or it could be good for us. According to some people, at a same time,
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the internet
 has brought people closer together while others think that people and communities are becoming more alone or feeling loneliness.
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The internet
 has connected people through various online chatting platforms through which they meet new people.
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, there are some people who think that it has
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 divided the people and communities as well. Yeah, it's true, due to vast difference in people generation, some group of community facing
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 problem. All it depends on people age, if a person is an age of 60+ he or she will face
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 situation because they don’t know how to use
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the internet
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The internet
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 has a bad impact on small age group due to online chatting, watching videos and many
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 things and due to
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 they are becoming more isolated. To conclude,
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the Internet
 has brought people closer together, but it's always depends on people who want their life to be isolated or not.
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