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You should spend about 45 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Nowadays, experience is more valued in the workplace than knowledge in many countries. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write 250 words. Write here: ...

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In our contemporary society, the skill and professionalism are believed to be more
valid
(usually used in combination) having value of a specified kind
valued
 by the majority of employers, while the other people hold the view that education is the most important factor for
labors
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labours
lupus
. I personally think that the merits of hiring experimental employee outweigh the demerits. In
this
 essay I will put forth some reasons to support my view before arriving at
conclusion
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a conclusion
conclusions
the conclusion
. The only main drawback of having not
educational degree
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an educational degree
 from
university
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a university
 is that students can be informed about the appearance of their major. Students have learnt theoretically either about previous drawbacks and achievement of accomplished projects or have noted about the former stable principles of the major which they have educated.
As a result
 of that the informative employees have been justified about primary principle, while many ways should be examined by the empiricism trainers. Having said
that
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that, however
however
, I feel that being
skillful
having or showing knowledge and skill and aptitude
skilful
 and expert
at
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in
work‘s field
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the work‘s field
a work‘s field
 has more benefit.
First
 and foremost, the
budget which
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budget, which
 is dedicated to learning
labors
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labours
labs
 will be reduced.
Therefore if
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Therefore, if
 the employed person
be
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is
is being
 enough expert and proficient in the specific major, the expenses of their errors will be plummet remarkably. A good illustration is about accounting department. A new accountant who worked in another company, had gained enough experience
about
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on
 the way of how
efficiently control
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efficiently controls
 company‘s account since have started to work. Another compelling reason for my position is that when the employer hire proficient jobholder, not only is the employee informative enough about work environment, but
also the person has
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the person also has
broad horizon
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a broad horizon
broad horizons
 about firm‘s procedure.
Consequently
 the
employe‘s
a person or firm that employs workers
employer
 valuable experience is available for conducting in severe circumstance. In conclusion, given the above consideration the benefits of employing expert jobholders are outweighed disadvantages.
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