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Some People believe that Robots play an important role in future societies, while others argue that robots might have negative effects on societies give often.

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Introduction
Recentdevelopments
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Recent developments
 in technology have paved the way for
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use
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the use
 of robots not only in industrial sectors,
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as
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As
 in the past, but
also
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 in commercial and private sectors.
This
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 ongoing transformation and ubiquity of
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robots
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Robots
 in everyday life has caused many to speculate that robots may play a negative role in the future,
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while
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While
 another school of thought holds that the onset of robots is likely to only have benefits. It seems
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likely
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Likely
 that any positive role played by robots in the future will be limited and human society should be
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wary
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Wary
 of their
use
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.
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One
such
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 reason for wariness lies in the risk
to
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in
 the labour market. As robots gradually become more and
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more
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More
 capable of doing tasks that humans would
otherwise
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 perform, it is highly likely that they will
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replace
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Replace
 humans in many spheres of
work
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 due to their cost-efficiency and high-quality of
work
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.
This
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, in
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turn
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Turn
, could relegate humans
to
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into
 doing simple maintenance of these machines, doing dehumanised
work
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or
introduces an alternative
Or
, even more worryingly, falling out of the labour pool entirely. An example of
this
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 has already been
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found
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Found
 in the motor industry, during the 1970’s when many people were made redundant as a result of
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the
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The
 growing amount of savings that could be made by a company which used more robots to produce
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vehicles
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Vehicles
.
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Despite these concerns, many argue that robots will impact our lives in a positive manner. They argue
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this
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This
 because they see the benefits of labour-saving, arguing that household chores, humdrum routines
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and
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And
 dangerous
work
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 could all be done by robots. Following
this
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, they argue, a new era of increased
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leisure
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Leisure
 time for all humanity will be ushered in. They point to the labour-saving capacities of vacuum
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cleaners
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Cleaners
, tablets and other technological devices as evidence of
this
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.
This
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,
however
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,
seems unlikely to
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seems unlikely
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happen
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Happen
 due to the fact that the length of the working week has not been reduced in any way, shape or
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form
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Form
 over the
last
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 50 years. On the contrary, it seems many people now
work
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 harder than ever.
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To sum up, it seems that while there are likely to be some benefits to the uptake in the
use
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 of robots for
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household
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Household
 chores and other dangerous
work
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, it is difficult to imagine a society in which these benefits
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have
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Have
 led humanity to free itself from the shackles of labour. Rather, there is past evidence that the
use
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of
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Of
 robots is a threat to the society that we live in, and is likely to leave a lot of people on the
scrapheap
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scrap heap
Conclusion
of
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Of
 progress.

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