You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter • say why he/she would not enjoy going to college • explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her • suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter ad follows:

#friend #advice #college #job #idea #addresses #ad

Dear Rahul, I hope you and your family doing well. I received your letter, thanks for consulting me before taking

this

important decision of your life either you should work or study. I can recollect that you told me about your ambitions and career plans. I don't think you will enjoy your college as your ambition is totally opposite to a college student.

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job

will expose you

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real corporate world and you can learn what you always wanted to. I

rememebr

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remember

when I passed my graduation and choose

Master's

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above

job

. Believe me, I regret my decision till now and won't like you to do the same mistake.

Also

market

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is growing and in

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the next

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year

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you will see more growth

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this

. I would really

happy

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if you choose

job

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a job

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in software engineering. I know you are very good

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coding and designing

website

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This

type of

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will give you the opportunity to learn the new market trends and latest technologies, which will give you an extra edge in your growth. I am coming to Delhi

month,

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plan to

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at that time. Contact me if you need anything. Cheers, Jatin

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firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

199 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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