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Nowadays people moving to other countries to seek job. Some people think it affects the children of such home negatively while some others think it is beneficial to them. Discuss both sides and state your opinion.

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People do jobs in order to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 the basic necessities of life.It is said by some individuals that it has
negative impact
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a negative impact
 on the children
,
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,
while others think that it will bring some
postive
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
 changes in their life. In my perspective,
this
 trend will put
positive impact
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a positive impact
 on the children and my viewpoints on
this
 topic will be elaborated in the aforementioned paragraphs.
To begin
 with, when any family
memeber
one of the persons who compose a social group (especially individuals who have joined and participate in a group organization)
member
members
 move from their homeland to another
country
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country, then
then
 it increases the responsibilities of all the family members.
For instance
, a child whose father has gone to another
country
 cannot get proper attention and care from his father because long distance and sometimes children indulge in a bad company whenever they do not get
proper attention
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the proper attention
 and time of their family members
.
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.
On the other hand
, there are some advantages of
this
 trend.
First
 merit is that in some
countries people
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countries, people
 consider that some of the profession are not made for themselves so they migrate to other countries so that they can earn money to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 the needs of their children.Another benefit is that when one family member is migrated to another
country
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country, then
then
 it
make
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makes
 others more responsible and they become independent
.
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.
 To recapitulate,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would like to write that when anyone moves to another
country
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country, then
then
 it changes the thinking and perspective of those people
.
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