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the total of Japanese who go to a board for tourism and the percentage of Australian in Japan’s tourist market from 1985 to 1995 rise. Do you agree or disagree

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The supplied charts depict the quantity of Japanese people who tends to travel oversea over the period of 10 years commencing from 1985 and Australia's stocks of Japan’s tourist market As can be seen clearly, there
were
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was
 an upward trend in both the number of Japanese's
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 aboard Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market between 1985 and 1994
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 with the total of tourists aboard in japan hovered around 5
million
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 in 1985.
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, it was a significant increase
to
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of
 roughly 11
million
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 after 5 years.
However
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, the number of Japanese tourists
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 aboard witnessed a slow decrease by 1
million
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 in the
next
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year followed
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year, followed
 by a sharp rise up again in the
next
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 four years and reached a highest peak of nearly 16
million
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 in 1995
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, the percentage of
Australia
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Australians
 of stock in
japan
a constitutional monarchy occupying the Japanese Archipelago; a world leader in electronics and automobile manufacture and ship building
Japan
 experienced a dramatic growth from 2% to approximately 6% over the period of 8 years beginning from 1985
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 decreasing slightly to 4% in 1989.
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contrast Australia's
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contrast, Australia's
 share saw a slow fall by 0.2% at the end of the period.
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