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Some car manufacturing companies have stated that there is a possibility that we will see flying cars in the future. Why is this going to happen? Will it be positive or negative development?

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Globally, traffic congestion is one of the biggest problems which every country is trying to deal with. Advancement in technology and increasing trend of community to use the fastest travelling option, has risen the likelihood of introduction of flying cars. In my opinion, it will bring a positive impact overall.
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, individuals can own the flying car and travel anywhere and everywhere they want to.
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 will discuss, how people can reach out their loved ones on important occasions.
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, it can have a negative impact as well, because the probability of death risk will be increased which will be discussed in
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. On one hand, it is considered
now a days
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, that world is like a global village, where everyone is living far away for each other, but still they want to celebrate the important events with their friends and family. In ancient times, it was not
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 in recent times, with the introduction of flying automobile it will be very easy to fly at any time at very economical rate.
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, my grandfather used to narrate me that he spent his 20 years away from family in
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Scotland, but
 because of limited and expensive flights, he couldn’t celebrate the holy occasion of Eid
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 Adha with his parents many times.
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 the probability of accidents and death rate can rise dramatically, because driving the flying cars will need special training which everyone would not be able to afford, so there will be chances that teenagers will start driving without proper certification.
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, Civil Aviation Department of Canada published a report in 2019 stating that they will only support
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 of flying cars if each pilot will be able to get intensive coaching for at least two years, which will cost approximately USD 8000 per pilot. In conclusion, I am strongly in
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 to see flying vehicles with easy buying options.
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, automobile industries should implement strict control measures and issue proper understandable user manuals to control the foreseeable damages.
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