In most developed countries shopping is not only about buying the goods you need, it is also perceived as entertainment. Is it a positive or negative development? Give your own opinion and examples based on your experience.

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In many nations people would like to do shopping as an enjoyment purpose as well as consuming needy goods. In my

opinion it

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opinion, it

has both

positve

characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.

positive

and

nagative

characterized by or displaying negation or denial or opposition or resistance; having no positive features

negative

effects either for

shoping

searching for or buying goods or services

shopping

or as an entertainment,

also

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people would purchase more things in

shopping mall

Suggestion

a shopping mall

shopping malls

. The

esaay

an analytic or interpretive literary composition

essay

essays

shall

dicuss

to consider or examine in speech or writing

discuss

both

postive

characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.

positive

and negative effects of the statement from the bird's eye view up to arriving a concrete answer. There are measurable positive effects which can frame the statement towards shopping and

jubilent

joyful and proud especially because of triumph or success

jubilant

activites

any specific behavior

activities

shopping

Suggestion

Shopping

malls are

act

Suggestion

acting

stress buster

Suggestion

a stress buster

for stressed inhabitants because malls are giving an

opportunities

Suggestion

opportunity

for discounts

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an adverts

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banners.

to a very great extent or degree

, they would feel an

anxity

(psychiatry) a relatively permanent state of worry and nervousness occurring in a variety of mental disorders, usually accompanied by compulsive behavior or attacks of panic

anxiety

free after shopping. A massive malls are

manged

be successful; achieve a goal

managed

spectacular for shopping

purpose

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purpose, consequently

consequently

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people could enjoy an atmosphere as well as shopping

expresses position, direction or location, or point in time

particular things.

Linking Words

Also malls

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Also, malls

has been giving

Suggestion

have been given

have been giving

were given

opportunites

a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances

opportunities

for spending leisure

activites

any specific behavior

activities

such

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as the scary house, the

play ground

an area where many people go for recreation

playground

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the dance bar, so individuals can spend more time as well as shopping. As a paradoxical view, malls are found

obnixious

causing disapproval or protest

obnoxious

by inhabitants for an entertainment as well as shopping needy things.

massive

Suggestion

Massive

malls

needs

Suggestion

need

big

maintance

activity involved in maintaining something in good working order

maintenance

mountains

and their bills are paid after

shopping

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shopping, although

although

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people would like to do an

enjoyment

Suggestion

enjoyable

as well as shopping.

shopping

Suggestion

Shopping

malls

needs

Suggestion

need

an excessive employment to

provides

Suggestion

provide

facilites

a building or place that provides a particular service or is used for a particular industry

facilities

so owners have pressure

attrects

direct toward itself or oneself by means of some psychological power or physical attributes

attracts

attract

the

counsumer

a person who uses goods or services

consumer

Nevertheless

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people do an excessive shopping as well as needy shopping daily

neccesities

the condition of being essential or indispensable

necessities

As a

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result people

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result, people

get enjoy

time but

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the time, but

the time but

their eyes got attracts towards an excessive

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choice

choices

cases

. In the conclusion

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mate statements an

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past tense of "will"

would

iuld like to say that shopping malls

are

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acting

act as stress buster as well as an enjoyment purpose so either people

get benif

financial assistance in time of need

benefited

ited or mall owners

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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In most developed countries shopping is not only about buying the goods you need, it is also perceived as entertainment. Is it a positive or negative development? Give your own opinion and examples based on your experience.

Fully explain your ideas

It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishments should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviours to children?

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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new fast trains between cities. others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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