In most developed countries shopping is not only about buying the goods you need, it is also perceived as entertainment. Is it a positive or negative development? Give your own opinion and examples based on your experience.

In many nations people would like to do shopping as an enjoyment purpose as well as consuming needy goods. In my
opinion it
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opinion, it
has both
positve
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
and
nagative
characterized by or displaying negation or denial or opposition or resistance; having no positive features
negative
effects either for
shoping
searching for or buying goods or services
shopping
or as an entertainment,
also
people would purchase more things in
shopping mall
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a shopping mall
shopping malls
. The
esaay
an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essay
essays
shall
dicuss
to consider or examine in speech or writing
discuss
both
postive
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
and negative effects of the statement from the bird's eye view up to arriving a concrete answer. There are measurable positive effects which can frame the statement towards shopping and
jubilent
joyful and proud especially because of triumph or success
jubilant
activites
any specific behavior
activities
.
shopping
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Shopping
malls are
act
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acting
as
stress buster
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a stress buster
for stressed inhabitants because malls are giving an
opportunities
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opportunity
for discounts
,
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,
an adverts
,
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,
banners.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
, they would feel an
anxity
(psychiatry) a relatively permanent state of worry and nervousness occurring in a variety of mental disorders, usually accompanied by compulsive behavior or attacks of panic
anxiety
free after shopping. A massive malls are
manged
be successful; achieve a goal
managed
spectacular for shopping
purpose
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purpose, consequently
consequently
people could enjoy an atmosphere as well as shopping
a
expresses position, direction or location, or point in time
at
particular things.
Also malls
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Also, malls
has been giving
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have been given
have been giving
were given
opportunites
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
for spending leisure
activites
any specific behavior
activities
such
as the scary house, the
play ground
an area where many people go for recreation
playground
,
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,
the dance bar, so individuals can spend more time as well as shopping. As a paradoxical view, malls are found
obnixious
causing disapproval or protest
obnoxious
by inhabitants for an entertainment as well as shopping needy things.
massive
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Massive
malls
needs
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need
big
maintance
activity involved in maintaining something in good working order
maintenance
mountains
and their bills are paid after
shopping
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shopping, although
although
people would like to do an
enjoyment
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enjoyable
as well as shopping.
shopping
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Shopping
malls
needs
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need
an excessive employment to
provides
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provide
facilites
a building or place that provides a particular service or is used for a particular industry
facilities
so owners have pressure
attrects
direct toward itself or oneself by means of some psychological power or physical attributes
attracts
attract
the
counsumer
a person who uses goods or services
consumer
.
Nevertheless
,
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,
people do an excessive shopping as well as needy shopping daily
neccesities
the condition of being essential or indispensable
necessities
.
As a
result people
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result, people
get enjoy
time but
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the time, but
the time but
their eyes got attracts towards an excessive
choises
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choice
choices
cases
. In the conclusion
, I agglori
mate statements an
d I wo
past tense of "will"
would
iuld like to say that shopping malls
are
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acting
act as stress buster as well as an enjoyment purpose so either people
get benif
financial assistance in time of need
benefited
ited or mall owners
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