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In some countries, health care and education are only partially funded by the government. Some people argue that the government should be responsible for covering the full cost of these services. Do you support or oppose? Give opinion.

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Healthy
life
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 and quality
education
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 are key aspects of a person’s
life
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.
Government
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 of some countries provides partial help to their citizens.
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, some
citizen
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 argues that
government
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 should pay fully for medical and
education
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 facilities. In my opinion,
government
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 should pay fully for primary medical and basic
education
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 to citizens. These free services of
government
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 helpful for poor or jobless people, they can use these facilities for the betterment of their
life
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. Medical and
education
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 both of them are most costlier services. Healthy and educated people contribute in the development of a country. Healthy and well-educated people can grow well in their career and eventually it is beneficial to the prosperous country.
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,
citizen
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 pays taxes to the authority so they have right to get better facilities. Complex health care includes surgeries and costly medicines that should be taken care by the individual.
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, some people go overseas to pursue higher
education
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 that will benefit to individuals more than a country. So, an individual should bare these charges by themselves. If these services are
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 getting free of cost
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 its quality would be degraded.
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, to get quality services
citizen
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 have to pay at least some amount of revenue.
For
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In
 complex health care and higher
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education individual
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education, individual
 should invest in insurance and other
government
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 policies. To sum it up, I opine that
government
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 should take responsibility for primary health and primary
education
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 of
citizen
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 fully.
Education
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 and healthy
life
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 are two basic needs of every
citizen
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 and a
government
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 is in fact, formed to make sure no
citizen
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 is deprived of his basic needs.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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