Very few schoolchildren learn about the value of money and how to look after it, yet this is a critical life skill that should be taught as part of the school curriculum. Do you agree or disagree?

Irrefutably,
money
plays
very crucial role
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a very crucial role
in our lives, without which we cannot
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
our basic
requistics
express the need or desire for; ask for
requests
like food, clothing and shelter. We must understand the
value
of
money
and impart the same to our children already aware the
value
of it and ways to handle cash while
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
says that
money
management skills should be included as part of
school curriculum
Suggestion
the school curriculum
.
Although
, I strongly agree with
this
statement, let me elaborate both the views and concluded with my perspective.
To begin
with,
school
going children donor
require
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requires
money
and find relevant about financial affairs in
subject
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the subject
. All their necessities and things are taken care
by
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of
their
parents including
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parents, including
pickup
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pick up
and drop from
school
. These kids are very young and it is hard to explain the importance and benefits of
money
in
such
a tender age.
For instance
, my cousin, who is 10 years old says that he does not want any
money
and not desire to know the
value
of it. Because his requirements are fulfilled by his father and mother. All
that is
important for him to concentrate on studies and score good grades and finance related subjects can be studied during
degree course
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the degree course
.
On the other hand
, some parents work on
day
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a day
to
day
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day's
wages and
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wages, and
earn very poor wages which can only gratify their daily living. Even though they are struggling, they want their children to excel in study and able to attain
respectful position
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a respectful position
the respectful position
in the society. But their wards
donot
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do not
consider their parents assiduous works and never appreciate.
Instead they
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Instead, they
demand
money
for buying chocolates and clothes. Here comes the need to be aware of the
value
of
money
and tactics to take care of it. In a nutshell, even though the
money
is not important to
school
children but
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children, but
some basic knowledge of
money
, it's use and ways to manage should be inculcated in
school
curricula for their holistic development.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial literacy
  • curriculum
  • fiscal responsibility
  • money management
  • budgeting
  • saving
  • investing
  • adult population
  • financial decisions
  • educational systems
  • theoretical curriculum
  • practical life skills
  • real-life experience
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