Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes ( for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children) To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It’s indeed humans are the most intelligent being in the world. Because of the innovation of science, Earth is in the palm of the human hand now.
Naturel
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Natural
resources should
use
for the best living of
man kinds
all of the living human inhabitants of the earth
mankinds
. It's not the best idea to
use
all of the natural assets because the resources will come at the end one day. In that case, I strongly disagree with the statement. At the very beginning of mankind, they depend nature to build
home
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homes
with woods, and creatures, plants for the food. In
this
modern age, the human population exploded, that's why deforestation in order to build a home, hunting the
last
species of wild animal for food, filling up the rivers, and low depth sea of living space. All
this
overuse of
elements
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the elements
will have adverse reactions
on
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in
to
nature,
as a result
of low oxygen in the atmosphere, tsunami, and extinction of species.
Secondly
, to explore the earth we need the energy to build and run cars, trains, and plans. All these vehicles need fuel to
run which
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run, which
totally depends on mining oil.
Over
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After
exploring the world cause of various
kind
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kinds
of pollution like air, water.
Furthermore
, Air-filled with carbon
dioxide which
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dioxide, which
causes
arise temperature
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a rise in temperature
a rise temperature
of the atmosphere and melting down the glaciers.
Moreover
, the seawater level rise causes inhabited sinks and a shortage of drinking water.
However
, some people think we should
use
nature for our better inhabited.
Use
all kinds of natural elements in a tolerable manner.
I
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My
addition we
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addition, we
can
use
the recycling system is a brilliant idea to save the forest and reforestation as a policy will be a breakthrough to keep the resources. We could
use
alternative natural forms of energy,
such
as solar, tidal or wind, which are infinite and power from them does not pollute the environment. We should not abuse Mother Nature and we must think about future generations, so we should exploit natural resources with care and, if possible,
use
alternative sources of energy and new effective technology and recycling.
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