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Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Other disagree and think that the hist should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The lifestyle of people
hass been changed
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has been changing
has been changed
 day by day, people love to travel more frequently to
new place
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a new place
 with new customs
,
Accept space
,
traditions and behaviour as well. Some people say that visitors should learn and follow the local customs and behaviours of that particular
country
 before travelling.
However
, other people argue that tourists, as consumers have a right to do what they want. In
this
 essay we will discuss about relevant arguments. Obviously, it is necessary for tourists
,
Accept space
,
 to know the local norms and values to some degree.
Firstly
, it will help them feel comfortable with local inhabitants and avoid conflicts during their trip.
Secondly
.
if
Suggestion
If
 the traveller will obtain information before the visit
then
 it will ease them to
adopt
make fit for, or change to suit a new purpose
adapt
 to the new situations. If they will accept the people and their culture and values,
accordingly
 local people will accept and welcome
them which may
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them, which may
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 the purpose of their visit.
This
 will
also
 help in communication and would definitely have a sense of respect to someone in a foreign
country
. In
this
 way one may prevent oneself from getting into a situation of cultural misunderstanding. The more visitors will give respect to local culture the more they will receive love and kindness from local people and will enjoy the trip
throughly
in an exhaustive manner
thoroughly
.
However
, for the visitors it may be difficult in some extent. As a host
country
, it is responsibility to show a warm welcome by trying to provide visitors with friendly surroundings with less cultural shocks.
In addition
, the more visitors will come, the
country
's economy is
also
 improved, and will spread the
informations
a message received and understood
information
of
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about
 different cultures. The local people will
also
 get
opportunity
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the opportunity
an opportunity
opportunities
 to learn others cultures and traditions while staying in their own
country
. The host
country
 should accept the cultural difference. With all
this
 taken into account, In
this
 age I believe both the visitors and hosts should welcome
cultiural
of or relating to the arts and manners that a group favors
cultural
 differences. There are many nations accepting cultural differences which may help the travel industry and tourists may have more fun and love to visit that
country
 again and again.
However
, a traveller should always remember to respect the customs and behaviours of their hosts.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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