In some areas of the US,a 'curfew' is imposed,in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of the doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompained by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

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Experts
throughtout
all the way through
throughout
US
belives
accept as true; take to be true
believes
believe
that it is vital to confine
adoloscents
a juvenile between the onset of puberty and maturity
adolescents
to go out of their homes late
night
and is
case
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the case
they have to their
gaurdians
a person who cares for persons or property
guardians
gardens
guardian's
should escort them.Personally
,
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,
I see eye to eye with the central view.
This
essay will two key reasons and significance using examples from the US government report and York University to demonstrate points and prove arguments. To
commense
take the first step or steps in carrying out an action
commence
with
,
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,
in recent years there has been
surge increase
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a surge increase
the surge increase
in transgression with teenagers in
few states
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a few states
of
US
Suggestion
the US
esspecially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
specially
at
night
.To illustrate
,
Accept space
,
June 2020 US crime report published the list of
vunerable
susceptible to attack
vulnerable
venerable
states for
villiant
acting with or marked by or resulting from great force or energy or emotional intensity
violent
activites
any specific behavior
activities
out of which 90% happened at
night
.
Thus
,
Accept space
,
officials decided to implement
curfew
Suggestion
a curfew
in these states.
Furthermore
,
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,
it was
obersed
having or showing excessive or compulsive concern with something
obsessed
abreast
that victims of
such
gruesome acts suffer mentally
,
Accept space
,
traumasited
occurring among members of a family usually by heredity
transmitted
emotionally and in severe cases become physically disabled which put dead end to their bright future.The best example is, the dreadful Alexiya rape incident which took place on
unfatefull
not true to duty or obligation or promises
unfaithful
night
of January 2020 in
michigen
a midwestern state in north central United States in the Great Lakes region
Michigan
state
,
Accept space
,
it was reported that she went out with her
freinds
a person you know well and regard with affection and trust
friends
for
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to
the party and later found
uncouncious
not conscious; lacking awareness and the capacity for sensory perception as if asleep or dead
unconscious
in
woods
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the woods
with in
internal to, not outside; located in the bounds of
within
miserable condition
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miserable conditions
a miserable condition
and is now in coma.
Although
later
criminial
someone who has committed a crime or has been legally convicted of a crime
criminal
was caught post
investigation but
Accept comma addition
investigation, but
Alexia went in
coma leaving
Accept comma addition
coma, leaving
her parents in pain.
As a result
, it is
conclusively
Suggestion
concluded
conclusive
,
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,
goevernment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
official took
this
decision to protect the
teeangers
a juvenile between the onset of puberty and maturity
teenagers
.
On the other hand
,
Accept space
,
teenagers are not comfortable
in
Suggestion
with
can cause distress among the
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
as they feel bounded and house
arresr
take into custody
arrest
,
Accept space
,
which can lead to
quarel
have a disagreement over something
quarrel
quarrels
with their parents and go to the extend of protest which was
seen in primarily
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seen primarily
in
western states
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the western states
of
US
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the US
.I
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
governement
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
governments
should start
awarness
having knowledge of
awareness
campains
an institution created to conduct business
companies
which can make them
undeerstand
know and comprehend the nature or meaning of
understand
understands
the importance of the parents to accompanying them at
night
so that they
donnot
Suggestion
don not
become anti social.Their should
theatercal
of or relating to the theater
theatrical
displays in school so that they can relate and understand the importance of
such
restrcition
a principle that limits the extent of something
restriction
. To conclude
,
Accept space
,
in my opinion parents
are
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is
gurdian
a person who cares for persons or property
guardians
guarding
and protectors of the children and as they
donot
Suggestion
do not
have the maturity to handle themselves in felony situations.Albeit
,
Accept space
,
gorvernment
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the government
government
governments
are taking
Suggestion
is taking
strict actions as a matter of fact they focus on changing
mindset
Suggestion
the mindset
of
adolocent
a juvenile between the onset of puberty and maturity
adolescents
adolescent
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enforce
  • juvenile
  • repercussions
  • autonomy
  • adolescence
  • paternalistic
  • delinquency
  • municipality
  • ordinance
  • authoritarian
  • peer pressure
  • social dynamics
  • civil liberties
  • community policing
  • preventative measures
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