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Some people think that rich countries should support poor countries in terms of aid for health care and education.agree or disagree.

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Its really appreciable step to support any country.It is said by some individuals that rich countries should financially
assit
give help or assistance; be of service
assist
 poor nations
for
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in
 providing health
,
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,
care and educational facilities.I totally agree with the statement and my viewpoints on
this
 issue will be elaborated in the aforementioned paragraphs.
To begin
 with, there are some countries like Pakistan
,
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,
Nepal
,
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,
 Bhutan where people do not have access to medicines and they are living below
poverty line
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the poverty line
 and many children die there from malnutrition
,
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,
 so rich countries should donate some
money
 to these nations in the form of charity.
For instance
, an organisation should be made and its purpose should be to monitor the condition of poor nations and ways should be found to give
money
 to those countries so that people can get medicines.
Furthermore
, rich countries should
also
 donate
money
 to poor countries so that they can raise the level of their education
.
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.
To illustrate, a survey was conducted in
India which
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India, which
 is
also
 considered poor and its result was that only theoretical knowledge is imparted in India and
laboratries
a workplace for the conduct of scientific research
laboratories
 and technology is less developed here. All the rich countries should give
money
 to poor nations so that these nations can raise the level of their education. To recapitulate,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would like to write that it should be the prime duty of rich countries to help and support them because if these nations will help poor nations
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 rich countries can have a chance to get efficient workers people from poor nations.
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