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some of the world's languages are now spoken very little, so step should be taken to prevent their complete decline To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#world #languages #step #decline
In recent years, it has been supposed that there are unbalanced in the
language
 used by humans. Some people claimed that their dialect is on the verge of degeneration, which lose their national identity. From my point of view, I strongly disagree with
this
 idea and I will give you some benefits of globalization stemming from focusing on a piece of the main
language
 which is English in its below sentence. Apparently, only using a little main
language
 in the world
create
Suggestion
creates
 an ideal condition for making a connection between international partner without a translator. Specifically, we will
except
consider or hold as true
accept
possibilities
Suggestion
the possibilities
 of ally's misunderstanding or leaking a piece of important information from translators in both small scale and big-scale conversation. In the case of a football player transferred to another country, having small talk with
fundamental
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a fundamental language offer
the fundamental language offer
language
 offer
enormous benefit
Suggestion
enormous benefits
for
Suggestion
of
 integrating with foreigners without
language
 barriers.
Accordingly
, they have a good sense of community with their team or those who live
surrounding
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surrounded
 them.
Likewise
, enhancing some main
language
 for all people in the world bring an advantage for understanding the whole
knowledge
. It seems to be unclear
knowledge
 if you translate information involving in another
language
 on network pages.
This
 is because technology has not completed in the range of elaboration yet.
Consequently
, there is the wrong
knowledge
 appears widespread on the social
network which
Accept comma addition
network, which
 is going to build an awful society now and
then
. It is logical to conclude that
knowledge
 may be distorted when it gets through a lot of languages.
Hence
, keeping their tradition and lifestyle is much more precious than keeping their unique
language
, which is seen as keeping their national identity,
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