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In some countries,many people do not have enough money to access the internet.Should governments be responsible for ensuring that everyone can get access to the internet? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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In
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On
 our planet exist various problems related to not having enough
food
 to live. Nowadays, in many poor
countries millions
Accept comma addition
countries, millions
 of people are suffering from malnutrition and starvation. In
this
 essay I will present the causes of
problem
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the problem
problems
 and possible measures to reduce it.
Firstly
, hunger or lack of
food
 affects only on
poor population
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the poor population
 of
country
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the country
. Because the wage that they earn would not be good enough to buy products. The poor, does not own opportunity of earning a high profit.
Therefore
, if
food
 had been in available prices, they would have received it.
For instance
, while some people have been needing for
food
 for a long period, other wealthy people haven't been even thinking about it.
Secondly
, the change in climate
also
 causes starvation. Obviously, in some countries, conditions similar to droughts
continues
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continue
 for
long time
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a long time
.
Thus
, people living in these regions
can not
can not
cannot
 grow their
food
. They depend on
food
 grown in other areas, and if not, these people will have to suffer from hunger. A good example is some parts of Africa, where had not rained for years, and they confronted problems of malnutrition. In order to solve
this
problem
, the government should allow that
products
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product
 of
food
 are available for the poor. Namely free or at enough cheap prizes.
Additionally
, in my point
of of
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of
 view, government should not spend money for unnecessary things. Interestingly, some governments might be spending a lot of finances to celebrate something, while
country
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the country
is confronting
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is confronted
 with a big
problem
. To conclude, hunger continues even in the 21st century. Not surprisingly,
this
 is caused by the lack of money and resources. Rich countries and rich people can do a lot to avoid
this
problem
 and poor might get enough to eat.
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