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Some people believe that the government should financially support retired people. Others feel that those who have retired should pay to support themselves. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, ways of caring about people, who had retired,
is
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are
controversial issue
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a controversial issue
controversial issued
controversial issues
. While, some people think that they should receive monetary endorsement, given by country’s authority, others are claiming that pensioners must perform a payment for maintaining themselves. In my point of view,
government
 should help only people, who
are acquiring
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is acquiring
 extremely low pension and do not have any relatives or family. Because, those people have not anyone to aid them, and they are not able to sustain themselves by
money
. There
are
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is
considerable
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a considerable amount
amount
 of people, convincing that
government
 should assist people, who stop working because of their age, by ensuring a finance. They think so, because, elderly people
has
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have
 many
troubles according
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troubles, according
 to their health, that could be easily damaged in result of long term working and consumption of unhealthy groceries.
Consequently
, these people require huge
amount
 of medicines, and medical aids that
does not cost
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do not cost
 cheap.
For instance
, despite my grandparents’ pensions’
amount
 is same with their salary, they always need extra
money
. So, these people believe that pensioners must be funded, because they deserve it by their years of hard work.
Although
, in every society there is opposite opinion, that think mature people should support themselves without obtaining exceed
money
.
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.
Because, their
amount
 of acquired
money
remain
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remains
 as they used to.
Moreover
, most of pensioners have children, who are capable of helping them. To illustrate, my grandparents can live without
government
’s help, because, we always care about them. Because of
this
, these people are claiming that retired people do not need
government
 maintenance. Personally, I think
authority
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authorities
the authority
 should fund
special group
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a special group
 of people
,
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,
 receiving very little
money
 and do not have
family
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a family
. Because, compared to others, they really cannot afford themselves anything,
furthermore
, there is no one to help them.
Consequently
, they will suffer a starvation or disease. So, I think they are the people, who really demand
government
 assistance. To conclude,
this
 essay discussed peoples’ views about aid for pensioners.
However
, I believe that
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