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Question It is observed that today communication between family members in today’s times is less as compared to the past. However, some people do not think so. Do you agree or disagree?

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In a near-future, shops will disappear since online sellers are rising rapidly and replacing them
first
. I agree with
this
 statement, and in my opinion, it is related not only with changes in user
preferences but
Accept comma addition
preferences, but
also
 with the necessity of reducing human interactions. On the one hand, violent content on web sites has been spreading faster amid users.
Moreover
, inappropriate videos are far more popular than appropriate videos on the net. According to paediatric psychologists, the incidence of mental disorders is rising and is directly associated with the fact that younger people communicate through
virtuality
Suggestion
Virtuality
fertility
.
Thus
, they are exposed to a considerable number of violent messages or inappropriate for their age.
On the other hand
, the use of social media has promoted changes in human language and communication.
Instead
 of expressing an idea by speaking, people would rather express their feelings or thoughts through posts.
Besides
, some even stop interacting face to face and start communicating through written messages. For that reason, sociologists and web researchers believe literacy will decrease drastically in the
next
 couple of years due to the fact children are easily the weakest group that can be affected by social media. In conclusion, for some people social networking sites might be a bad influence
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