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Economic growth is the only way to end world poverty. However, some people says it leads to environment damage and should be stopped. To what extent do you agree?

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Some people believe that students should be given
privilege
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the privilege
 to select their course of study while others think that every student should take
same classes
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the same classes
. Both
point
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points
 of
views
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view
has
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have
 its own boon and ban based on the students’ age and subject of study. On one hand, allowing the learners to choose their subject will help them to conquer and develop
themself
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
 in the field which they are interested in.
This
 method not only gives peace of mind to students it
also
 helps them to achieve more and invent new ideas or technologies which will help mankind.
For example
, when a sophomore
is given
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gives
 an opportunity to proceed his education
on
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in
 the field that he is interested, he will definitely come out with excellent new ideas and innovation as he does that out of his own will.
On the other hand
, making a student to choose his classes in young age will cause serious problems. He may eliminate more inevitable subjects like moral, environmental studies. Missing or avoiding these subjects will affect the society and world’s nature to
great extent
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a great extent
. To emphasize more, if one avoids learning of good morals
in correct
not correct; not in conformity with fact or truth
incorrect
 age, he may not know about the decorum and etiquette that has to be followed, due to which he may become a public menace. To recapitulate, students with should be given a chance to select their field of study in higher education.
However
, it’s not advisable to make young learners to choose and skip the lessons which are compulsory for every individual to learn.
Submitted by SWATHI PRIYA on

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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