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Nowadays more and more people choose living separately from their families. What are its causes and consequences?

#people #families #consequences
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Plenty of young people prefer
life
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 without families
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but one which can have depressing consequences on the people concerned.There seem to be two causes
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and a number of consequences
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which we will discuss here. Possibly the main cause is different conflicts of people with families
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especially in teen.The wide-ranging use of
Internet
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the Internet
 and social networks leads to deterioration of
relationship
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the relationship
relationships
 between parents and young
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which can be influenced negatively on
bith
two things or people together
both
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 well-known cause is contact with those around one that
beget
call upon in supplication; entreat
begged
bugged
 freedom not permission from parents.The
life
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 without families limit a majority of delight moments with relatives
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which can decrease a quantity of
life
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. The consequences of
this
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 problem
on
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of
with
for
 people can be quite serious.
Firstly
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increased stress levels are experienced because of difficulty in communication with own person.
This
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 can be especially damaging
health
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healthy
 for everyone.A
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 widely-observed impact is
lack
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the lack
 of sleep because of miss each other
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which can be be between relatives.In these cases
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people start work tired and disappointed
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which in most cases
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impact completely bad
to
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for
 health. Overall
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conflicts with parents and good
relation
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relationships
 with others seem to be the main causes
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and they
effect
have an effect upon
affect
 both individuals and their
life
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 quantity in the areas affected.
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