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i. #Globalization | #ForeignTrade - Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? (IELTS 10, AC)

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In
this
 era of globalization, products from other countries are increasingly made accessible all around the world.
This
 transition,
however
, has advantages as well as disadvantages. I shall
further
 discuss my views, on
this
 topic, in the following paragraphs. On one hand, foreign trade helps people to acknowledge and understand various cultures all over the world. Not only are they more aware of the different traditions and customs, but
also
 get to experience these benefits, from the comfort of their home place.
This
 type of trade is beneficial to many, who cannot afford to travel abroad.
On the other hand
, when
market
Suggestion
the market
 is globalized, tourism decreases due to the availability of goods from all nations.
This
 phenomenon,
also
 makes most countries appear to be similar,
thus
, losing their own individuality of cultural and ethnic values. In conclusion, the solution to
this
 problem is not simple. Though, the nations are at a disadvantage, the people themselves,
however
, benefit tremendously. In my view, the benefits outweigh the drawbacks,
hence
, I agree that globalization is a positive development.
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