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Some people think that homework is not necessary for children. Do you agree or disagree ?

#people #homework #children
Majority
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The majority
think
Suggestion
thinks
 that
home
 task is not necessary for school children, while others suppose that doing
homework
 has useful elements that can help them in the future. I would stress on that it is better to do
home
 assignment. There are several reasons that include refusing of
homework
. Many people emphasized on the
home
 assignment require loads of time. In that reason their children can’t get together with mates and it is coming to bad consequences. Social development may be decreased sharply. Whether teachers turn down to give
home assignment
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a home assignment
home assignments
 for school children it will prevent
this
 problem in the future.
This
 may lead to gaining status in contemporaries and not to be withdrawn.
On the other hand
, I believe that in any case more useful to carry on doing
homework
.
Besides they
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Besides, they
 have
to doing
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to do
 alone because it can help
for
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in
 improving their skills. Step by step their knowledge is getting well. By the
way after
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way, after
 having
progress
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progressed
 everyone gets to rely on yourself it means that confident feeling have increased. Another interesting point is that
teacher
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the teacher
always focus
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always focuses
 on pupils, Tutors can afford to check tasks which done at
home
. It may be useful for parents who always want to know about their children
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 and progress. For the reasons mentioned above, it seems to me there are several positive aspects
for
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of
 doing
homework
.
if
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If
 they want to get an education and reach a great achievement in the future in
this
 case it is compulsory.
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