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Some people think that public libraries are no longer important, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #libraries
As per the belief of some people, city libraries no longer hold the same significance as it did earlier.
However
, another section of people
emphasize
Suggestion
emphasizes
 on their existence which imparts a positive influence on the interested readers.
This
 essay shall delineate both the views in the subsequent paragraphs and present my opinion at the end. Public libraries have been overshadowed by the recent technological developments which have paved naïve ways of exploring the reader world.
Internet
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The internet
 provides with plethora of reading resources pertaining to different sections like news, entertainment, science, fiction etc. Each novel
that is
penned
to hold fast or prevent from moving
pinned
 down is easily available with just one click over
internet
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the internet
. Kindle by Amazon is the live successful example of it.
Such
 ease of access and
ubiquitousness
 explains the drift of fewer minds that undermine the necessity of public libraries.
Nevertheless
, another group of people
support
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supports
 the existence of public libraries. As per them, the information available on
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 may not date back and some imprints may have been
missing which
Accept comma addition
missing, which
 are safely conserved in some textbooks belonging to the primitive era. Not all are well versed with the concept of
internet
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the internet
,
such
bibliotheca
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Bibliotheca
 proves to be a boon to
such
 category of people. In conclusion, I believe that public libraries offer a great way of learning as it’s a reservoir of discrete books which are difficult to identify when we access the sites online.
Library
Suggestion
The library
A library
 is a treasure house that preserves different subjects all under one roof,
hence
 these should be retained for marginalized as well as future generations.
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