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Write about the following topic: In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Newspaper
Suggestion
The newspaper
 is very important
now a days
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
 for kids and young people. We get to gain knowledge and reading practices through
newspaper
Suggestion
the newspaper
newspapers
a newspaper
. In early
days
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day's
newspaper
 was the only social information.Very few young people and kids follow to read or watch news on TV.
This
 essay will convey about the young people reading or watching
about
Suggestion
on
 the news. Very few young people do follow to see and read news, because now a days more social
network
 has been arrived. And people are attracted to other activities like - Playing Cricket, hide and sick
ect
a legal document codifying the result of deliberations of a committee or society or legislative body
act
. Post that in social
network
 kids are interested where they find interesting
informations
a message received and understood
information
 that they wanted.
For example
 -
now a days
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
 kids are mostly playing with play stations, mobile games
,
Accept space
,
and outdoor games. So post studies
there
of them or themselves
their
 time gets off in these
activities
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activities, then
then
 watching
news
Suggestion
the news
 or reading
newspaper
. In early days people could know the information
of
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about
whats
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what's
 happening around the world only through
newspaper
Suggestion
the newspaper
, which gave reading practices as well. So kids of today
also
 have to read
news which
Suggestion
the news, which
the news which
 they do like for basic practice. So that they will improve the reading habit which will help them in
there
of them or themselves
their
 studies as well.
Atleast
Suggestion
At least
 ten
mintues
a written account of what transpired at a meeting
minutes
 of daily reading
newspaer
a daily or weekly publication on folded sheets; contains news and articles and advertisements
newspaper
 or watching news has to be followed by all the kids.
This
 above essay tells why the young people of today do not read or watch
news
Suggestion
the news
.
Its
Suggestion
It's
 because of todays social
network which
Suggestion
networks, which
networks which
 is improved a lot. So kids get attracted to those
network
Suggestion
networks
. Even though kids can gain knowledge
from
Suggestion
of
 social networks, it is must
to read
Suggestion
read
reading
newspaer
a daily or weekly publication on folded sheets; contains news and articles and advertisements
newspaper
 and watch news daily. It will help for
there
of them or themselves
their
 studies
also
, for better reading.
Submitted by Vivek on

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