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Some People Say That It Is Important To Keep Home And Workplace Tidy

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Experts believe that cleanliness is one of the great virtues to posses. Albeit, it is a diligent work to do, but, it has many reaping benefits
such
 as, increase of efficiency, comfort, Time Management and above all a balanced mind. Personally, I see eye to eye to the main idea. On one
hand
, A well organised home and workplace accelerates a balanced mind and make life comfortable, because, cluttered surroundings create distress, frustrations in the mind and affects decision making especially, in critical situations.
For example
, keys are the most frequently used items in our daily lives, if they are not hung on a key holder and goes invisible in a medical emergency situation, it will lead to a panic attack and in severe case end up losing close ones.
Further more
in addition
Furthermore
 cleanliness
also
 portrays the psychology of a person.A study of Harward Univeristy revealed that 90% people who believe in cleanliness belongings more affectionate and responsible as compared to others.
Thus
, it is important to keep things at their designated spot.
On the other
hand
, some people believe that not all things can be kept in their respective place.
For example
, if a person takes out a book from the shelf to read, generally, they tend to carry it along, and often keep it either on the table or bed. But that does not mean that they are not clean rather, it shows their attachment towards that book.Having mentioned
this
, there is nothing wrong till the time the one can find things easily. To summerize, excess of everything is bad, living a disciplined life is vital, but, it should not become obsessive compulsive disorder.In my opinion government and corporation should work
hand
 in
hand
 and organise workshops to make citizen more aware.
Submitted by Vaibhav on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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