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The bar charts give the information which
mention
Suggestion
mentions
 about international visitors to go to New Zealand
.
Accept space
.
 To be specific, the
first
Linking Words
 chart shows the reason why
their
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they're
 going. While the rest chart illustrates what transports
their
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they're
 used to during journey in
NewZealand
Suggestion
New Zealand
 Overall, It is
obviously
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obvious
 that the most common
transport
Use synonyms
 is
car
Suggestion
the car
. Whilst another
transport
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 use to moving is public
transport
Use synonyms
 which
include
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includes
 plane, coach, train and boat. The bar chart
campares
examine and note the similarities or differences of
compares
 five
reason
Suggestion
reasons
 why
guest
and nothing more
just
 going to New Zealand by the percentage. The proportion of spending time for walking is 85%, ahead of reason for sightseeing time for walking is 75%. The figure for boating is 50
percent
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, approximate with visiting volcanos by 3
percent
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,
Accept space
,
6
percent
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 for
vistiting
the activity of making visits
visiting
museum
Suggestion
the museum
 respectively. In
term
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terms
 of
transport
Use synonyms
 people using, the percentage of
car
Suggestion
cars
 which reach a peak of 70
percent
Use synonyms
. The proportion of other transports quite low which both plane and coach are over 30%. Following
this
Linking Words
,
train
Suggestion
a train
the train
 which
have
Suggestion
has
 percentage lower by 10%.
Finally
Linking Words
, Boat
using
Suggestion
is used
is using
uses
 to visit just under 5%
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