Nowadays many people have access to computers and a large number of children enjoy playing video games.What are the advantgaes and disadvantages of playing video games for children?

Nowadays many
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Nowadays, many
people have access to computers and a large number of children enjoy playing video games. What are the advantages and disadvantages of playing video games for children? Access to technology has increased significantly over two decades, and the children playing games increased too.Really in
this
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these
days children much hour spends front of
computer
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the computer
computers
a computer
and
this
attractive for themselves. I am against, like many parents. With regards to the advantages, playing
computer
games can develop children’s cognitive skills.
As a result
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another good point is that when playing games, children can feel relax and have fun. In fact, they might reduce their stress when playing many popular games with vivid imagery and sound effects
for example
: Pugb, counter strike and others.These mobile and
computer
games are very famous in Uzbekistan. And games help at the same time give work with a team.
On the other hand
, these games take many hours than our plan's time.
Computer
games distracting focus on study and
this
fall
the lapse of mankind into sinfulness because of the sin of Adam and Eve
Fall
we more expensive.Usually children think games frequently and speaking about levels.
Second problem
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The second problem
is lighting normal sit in front
computer
must be 60 Sm but many times we can see children don't follow that rule, especially in game point. If games have more kill, kick, stab and shoot that impact children's character they lead to with aggressive.
Finally
, if parents tell
thier
of them or themselves
their
children "you must go sport"
,
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,
that help children's interested real life.
For example
:
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my mother saying
me
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I
only
benifited
financial assistance in time of need
benefited
things, a two years
ago she
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ago, she
saying
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says
is saying
me
refers to the speaker or writer
I
must go swimming and
this
me helped growth in height. In conclusion, there are benefits of
computer
games, but there are disadvantages too. So parents need their children to focus more. Children should play games with under control of their parents.
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