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it is important to give children the opportunity to make decisions from an early age. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#children #opportunity #decisions #age
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People think giving
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 to youngsters in early age play a vital role in their
life
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. I would argue that that children deserve the best possible start in their
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,
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 why in my mind giving occasion to teens for decision is important. On the one hand majority has a different attitude about that, giving
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 for youngsters to decision in their early years helps become independent. Parents are always eager to bring up their children without needing and
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 their accustomed decide about children’s interest rather than children. I believe that it is inappropriate in different situations. Because youngsters' interest is very important for their future
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 parents ought to teach them to select the best pathway in a range of options. It means that when children choose the way which they want parents should support and explain
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 selection in a wide range about effects, good and bad sides.
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Moreover in
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 helping to teens to become independent.
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, it is obvious when children take the opportunity for their choice in early ages it’s inevitable to make mistakes.
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Furthermore
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Furthermore, second
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chance
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 must considered by parents. Because when teens choose some ways in their
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life it
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life, it
 is not always successful. In
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 situation parents shouldn’t argue them, but they are bound to navigate them to the right way and give them
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second
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a second chance
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 if it is relevant. In conclusion, children’s occasions are not to bordered by parents for selection. In my mind parents should teach them to find right choice since their childhood and they ought to act as a friend.
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