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Nowadays, more and more people are using consumer goods such as refrigerators and washing machines. Are there more advantages or disadvantages to this? Give your own opinion and examples.

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People have increased the
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 of the technological goods like fridges and washing machines.
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 these devices provide convenience to the job-goers, still rise in its usage would affect the environment, which makes the disadvantages far outweigh its advantages. Convenience appliances like automatic washing machines and cool storages would help the working people to spend less time on household chores and concentrate more on their professional lives. These appliances can be easily used by children
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 in the absence of their parents.
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, encouraging the
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 of latest technological devices would help to raise the standard of living of the people.
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, a recent survey reported that the sales of the automatic washers experienced a sharp rise, especially in places like Noida, Gurgaon, and most of the their customers are those people, who are employed.
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, people are buying these appliances more.
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, it would have a detrimental impact on the environment as the appliances like refrigerator emit chlorofluorocarbons, which is the biggest source of the greenhouse gases. Increase in its
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 would lead to increase in global temperature, which would have serious consequences in the future.
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, a recent study has shown that with the introduction of the refrigerators and air conditioners, problems like global warming has intensified, which have resulted in depletion of glaciers.
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, over reliance on these appliances would lead to the sedentary lifestyles.
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, government should restrict its excessive
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. To conclude, in my opinion, the disadvantage of climate change, which has been seen from the
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 of the consumer goods outstrips its advantage.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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