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Each year, the crime rate increases. What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity?

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Even though the standard of people`s
life
 has improved from past to now, the number of people involved in
crime
 is rising day by day.
Firstly
,
this
 essay will discuss the main cause of the problem, and
secondly
 will give suggestions on how to impede
such
 criminal acts. On the one hand, the main cause of people commits a
crime
 is that they are not satisfied with their living conditions and feel disproportionate. Some people are born with penniless and struggle to improve the quality of their
life
 during their whole lifetime, while certain people are born with fortune and create their own
life
 with the help of that destiny.
This
 disproportionate act provokes deprived people into vulgarity and violence against the government or wealthy people. In
this
 case, an unfair competition is causing hopelessness and frustration and wanting to earn quick money to make them criminals.
For instance
, during 20 years of economic difficulty in Europe, there was a rise in unemployment and a theft at the same time. The solution to
this
 problem is complicated, but feasible. Though the government can’t solve the unfair distribution all over the country, it can reduce the consequences of poverty and sustain a fair competitive environment.
Similarly
, securing a well-paying job can help people who want to provide their basic needs to steal from others. In fact, about 2.5 million youths are arrested on an annual basis, with the most common
crime
 being larceny-theft.
Therefore
, if a country promotes the
life
 of destitute people, it may reduce the
crime
 rate. In conclusion, the low level of living standard and disproportion between people caused an increase in
crime
 levels and the states ought to decrease the consequences of poverty and provide equitable conditions in due to the diminished
crime
 rates.
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