Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys?

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Most of us live in the peace, plenty and developing world and even our parents and grandparents do not remember
difficulties
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the difficulties
of their past, like
for instance
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consequences of the wartime or the shortage of products when stores were empty, people did not have enough food, clothes and everyone tried to keep their own things for
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generations.
Nowadays most
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Nowadays, most
of modern parents do not have these problems at all and they wish everything the best for their children and allow them
buy
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to buy
any toys they like. And here comes the question - is it a positive or negative trend when children have so many toys? Reach selection and incredible amount of toys, games and gadgets are very
useful
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usefully
and good for
organisation children’s time
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an organising children’s time
organising children’s time
, their development and sometimes even for their health,
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as help develop small motor skills. Given a choice, children can decide what they want and they have a freedom to spend their time with a game or a toy which they prefer. As far as we can see, they have a
reach
people who have possessions and wealth (considered as a group)
rich
childhood with many opportunities. On
another hand
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the other hand
other hand
, when child always gets everything what he or she wants, they cannot value it and get a wrong impression of real life and their future. Another interesting thing that
given
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has given
gave
so many different opportunities which should improve their mind and imagination eventually,
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result they
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result, they
are become not enough creative, world around seems to them boring and they just want to have a rest, more entertainments and do not resolve any difficulties. Of course, that does not apply to all of them, but statistically there are a lot of the same cases. In my opinion, the most important thing in
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question is that everywhere needs a balance. Any changes to one or
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
side tend to destructive results. Because toys have never had so important value,
which unlike
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which, unlike
them have
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they, have
they have
education
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an education
or parental attention and nothing can replace them.
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