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It is often said “when in Rome, do as the Romans do”. Do you think people should adapt and accept the culture of the country they visit? Do you think it is possible to learn a culture without learning the language?

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There exist distinctive features, dictating a certain body of laws, customs and rules that have developed in society and culture for a long time. The issue of
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 in different environment from usual one has aroused heated discussions since the formation of moral foundations. What the philosophy of life should be in community?
To begin
 with, people can ease tremendously a staying in
county
Suggestion
the county
, adapting and accepting the lifestyle of cultural traditions.
For example
, in some eastern nationalities there are types of clothing do not allow to open knees and décolletage as for men and women.
In other words
, people respect customs of
arrival’s region
Suggestion
the arrival’s region
an arrival’s region
, wearing closed clothing and following morals.
As a result
, they will be helpful and pleased to host of visitors.
Hence
,
this
 model of
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
, aforementioned higher, is beneficial in several aspects.
Although
, there are several factors that play role in the understanding culture’s mentality. The
dialog
a conversation between two persons
dialogue
on
Suggestion
in
 the same
language
 provide a deep dive
in
Suggestion
into
 the local’s atmosphere. To put it differently,
language
 is not considered only as a method of communication, but
also
 as a way to experiment and explore the local habits and ways of living.
For instance
, the lack of knowledge of the host country's mother tongue will prevent tourists in participating the daily activities of the locals. Despite of that, the knowledge of native
language
 is not one way to understand
locals
Suggestion
the locals
, using universal
language
 as English or translator. In conclusion, respecting the foreigners traditions while visiting their territory is a necessity for a successful visit, where learning their
language
 is very advantageous during the process.
Submitted by Мария Сидельникова on

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