Some people believe that children that commit crimes should be punished. Others think the parents should be punished instead. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There is no doubt that the number of children who are committing crimes has increased nowadays.

while

Suggestion

While

many argue that these children should be punished as per the severity of their crime, others believe that it is their parents who should be punished,

instead

of the children. I agree with the former view than the latter for several reasons. It is true that youngsters are not mature enough to understand the consequences of their actions. They either commit the crime on someone else's influence and do not have even the slightest idea that their actions are illegal. It is their parents' responsibility to keep a track of their kids, their activities and

also

the people whom they are meeting to avoid

such

mishaps

Suggestion

the

first

place. Failing to do it should put them behind the bars rather than their kids.

For example

, in India, if a child who is under age and doesn't have a license is caught driving, their parents will be arrested

instead

of the driver. It significantly reduced underage driving.

Therefore

, as it is the parents' responsibility to ensure their kids follow the rules, it should be them who should be penalized for their descendents' action.

However

, there are few crimes which should not be

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

209 words

4.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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