Some people believe that children that commit crimes should be punished. Others think the parents should be punished instead. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There is no doubt that the number of children who are committing crimes has increased nowadays.
while
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While
many argue that these children should be punished as per the severity of their crime, others believe that it is their parents who should be punished,
instead
of the children. I agree with the former view than the latter for several reasons. It is true that youngsters are not mature enough to understand the consequences of their actions. They either commit the crime on someone else's influence and do not have even the slightest idea that their actions are illegal. It is their parents' responsibility to keep a track of their kids, their activities and
also
the people whom they are meeting to avoid
such
mishaps
on
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in
the
first
place. Failing to do it should put them behind the bars rather than their kids.
For example
, in India, if a child who is under age and doesn't have a license is caught driving, their parents will be arrested
instead
of the driver. It significantly reduced underage driving.
Therefore
, as it is the parents' responsibility to ensure their kids follow the rules, it should be them who should be penalized for their descendents' action.
However
, there are few crimes which should not be
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