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Band 5

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You and your family are living in rented accommodation in an English speaking country. You are not satisfied with the condition of some of the furniture. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter introduce yourself explain what is wrong with the furniture say what action you would like the landlord to take You do NOT need to write any addresses.

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Dear
Mr.
Change the punctuation
Mr

The abbreviated title Mr. seems to be punctuated incorrectly. Consider changing the punctuation.

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 Josh, I am pinky Vivek, living at 106 B2 Hill Park Avenue Street. with my family including
mother
Correct pronoun usage
my mother

It seems that there is a pronoun problem here.

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, father and two brothers. We moved into the apartment
last
Linking Words

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 month and paid extra money for the furniture.
However
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, we have been having
Add an article
a problem

The noun phrase problem seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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problem
Fix the agreement mistake
problems

It seems that problem may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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 with the furniture
provide
Change the form of the verb
provided

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb provide. Consider changing it.

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. Recently we noticed that the bed is broken on one side and it creates difficulty in sleeping, even make much noise when we change our position.
Therefore
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, I am requesting you to replace the bed as soon as possible, because we are new here and we do not know the people who
fixing
Change the form of the verb
fix

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb fixing. Consider changing it.

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 that issue, so, I am sending you the full detail along with the bed pictures or you can come and check the furniture if you want. Let me know if you are required any
further
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

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this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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