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Some people think that excessive use of smartphones badly affects a teenager’s literacy skills. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that spending much
time
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 on mobile phones has negative impacts on the writing and reading abilities of young people. In my opinion, I am in
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 of those who completely agree with
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 view.
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, using excessively the amount of
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 on
phones
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the phones
 is considered as the main culprit causing a decrease in the literacy proficiency of youngsters.
This
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 stems from the fact that they have not enough
time
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 for academic studies at schools as well as the lack of
time
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 for their assignments at home, which means hours spent on mobile phones is not useful.
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, studying by the traditional education method should be encouraged
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.
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, adolescents have a tendency to interact with their friends via applications integrated
in
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into
 smartphones nowadays. They occasionally convey their ideas based on weird abbreviations and emotional icons which seem to be not familiar with someone who is from the former generation.
Subsequently
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, making use of
this
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 means of communication is a contributing factor to the conventional words standard and expressions. In conclusion, the written communication skills of
the young generation
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the younger generation
younger generation
a younger generation
 may be inferior to senior ones or those who are fond of reading. Recently, students have stuck their eyes hourly on phones’ screens for entertainment purposes, even read neither newspapers nor magazines while earlier people have frequently devoted their leisure
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 to bury in books or novels.
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, they might be a shortage of knowledge about the surrounding world and being unlikely isolated when joining an environment that includes old people. To conclude, by the above-mentioned reasons, I think that teenagers hook into their smartphones may be poor in reading and writing skills.
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