Schools are spending more time teaching subjects such as history. Some people think they should rather spend more time in teaching skills that can help students find a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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is allocated in the studying of courses like

history

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in many institutions. Some believe that most of

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should be used teaching students skills that can help them in the future to find a job. I completely disagree,

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, and will explain why I feel subjects like

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are relevant and should continue in these schools' syllabus.

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, it teaches about what happened many centuries ago and helps us not to forget the heroes that made those years a success.

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course sheds light on the innovative minds of our ancestors and their innovations that paved a way to modernisation.

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, we learn about the works of Michael

Farade

the English physicist and chemist who discovered electromagnetic induction (1791-1867)

Faraday

in the field of electricity and the modern light bulb. How he tried and

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fail to do something; leave something undone

failed

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to invent the

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electric

current nine hundred and

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being ten more than eighty

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-nine times,

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, on the one thousandth

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, it became a success.

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, helps to teach the future and present generations the benefits of

perserverance

persistent determination

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and the rewards of sticking to your goals.

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why spending

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is important.

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this

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points out where humanity failed. How we made mistakes in the past and their consequences. Some were minor and the others were major.

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has shown the constant desire of humans to kill one another,

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specifically happened during the world war one and two.

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big or small these errors made were, they had their lessons. It has taught us to avoid these events and to propagate peace and tranquility with

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each other

and has

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made it easy for the human race to learn to keep away from all acts of war.

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is why

history

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's relevance in the curriculum cannot be overemphasized. In conclusion,

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of the advantages of giving more

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to the teaching and learning of

history

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in classrooms, I strongly feel that their

time

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allocation should not be reduced. With more

time

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for the subject, students get to learn to make wiser and healthier decisions in all pursuits.

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