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Some people believe that sport is an essential part of school life for children, while others feel it should be purely optional. Discuss these opposing views and give your own opinion

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The educational system has been changed from past few decades. Some people argue that physical education and sports activities should be compulsory in the schools,
howeverhowever
Suggestion
however however
, other individuals think that the choice of the subjects should be optional by the students
.
Accept space
.
This
 essay shall intend to delve the both views and I completely agree that school management should make sports activities compulsory in their curriculum as these tasks makes youngsters fit and healthy. On the one side, why some people are In favour of to make
sport's
Suggestion
sports
sport
 activities compulsory in the educational institutions? Primarily, Been doing
sport's
Suggestion
sports
sport
 activities is not only the essential for the human body, but
also
 it is a good source of entertainment for the students. To
further
 strengthen my view, with the help of physical activities young people can make their body fit and healthy along when they get frustrated from 6 hours continue study
then
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than
 playing any sports
such
 as cricket, Badminton, Tennis they can feel relaxed and
also
 entertain themselves.
For example
, According to WHO stated that physical activities increases the metabolism of the body
as a result
, humans can easily flush out the toxic substance from their bodies which makes them unhealthy. On the flip side, some other people argue that the choice or the subjects in the educational institutions should be in the hands of the students whether they want physical education or any other subject.
This
 is because some students do not have any interest to take part in
sport
's since they have other hobbies
such
 as Music, Cooking, Dancing so that's why they do not want to waste their time and they want to focus only in their hobbies during the school time. To sum up,
Although
 school management gives choice to the students to opt their subject what they want to learn there should be a physical education compulsory.
This
 subject will not only help them to make physical fitness as well as the student who plays well in any
sport
 he/she can choose it as their career in the future.
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